Oh dear Ben, that's terrible.
It's lost the endearing post-apocalyptic feel of JA's version in favour of generic early-70s US rock.
In order to redeem yourself, clap your hearers around this...
"Do not force others, including children, by any means whatsoever, to adopt your views, whether by authority, threat, money, propaganda, or even education." - Ven. Thich Nhat Hanh
"Whether I were to preach in brief, Sāriputta, or whether I were to preach in detail, Sāriputta, or whether I were to preach both in brief or in detail, Sāriputta, rare are those who understand." (A I 333, Sāriputtasutta)